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帮忙看看这段英语语法是否正确
OK,here is it.We present you our new Vice City crew video Exision on such a special day.Firstly,HAPPY BIRTHDAY to The Big V's sister!She is getting one years old today.This can be a great gift for her though she dunno what
is stunt now.I wish she could spend a nice birthday and have a nice cake.
and this is the last video where Tim and All(Beast) participate.As you know,all(beast) was gone to army,and tim was gone to university.Wish they have a good time there
Then i wanna say sorry to eatab.I take your editing job man im sorry about that.
Thanks to noah for some recording helps and TBV for correcting reps,you guys really helped a lot.
There is no need to say more,just download it,watch it and reply.
Hope you like it

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here it is.she has been one year(no s) old today.dunno wot it is.could have a nice birthday and also a nice cake.the last video (in) which(not where) ...all(beast) has(not passive)...tim has gone...wi...