英语作文请求点评

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英语作文请求点评
Dear friends:
Welcome to our school.I would like to introduce you to know about the study of our school in two ways.The first way is
the study in groups,in which we can help each other and learn to listen.Because of it,we also can work together.Of course,we
tell our advice in our group,too.The second way is the study by ourselves.We make plans for ourselves.We can learn to make
good use of time in this way.We also can learn to thinking by ourselves.We are the master of our study.In these two ways,we
can make study more easier and interesting.That's all.
Thanks for listening!

答案

中国式英语呀,尽量别用中文的模式想句子.还有一些词组多次出现,可以用哪个相似的词代替一下.其他还挺通顺的.