帮忙改一下初二英语作文

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帮忙改一下初二英语作文
my dream
My name is Lin Tao.I have a dream.I want to have a robot named superman.He can do many things and he can play with me .He can move many heavy things .He can play basketball very well.He can play computer games too.He can da housework,like washing clothes and cooking.He can buy something for me . I believe mu dream will come true one day.

答案

He can do many things and he can play with me he can可以省略
He can move many heavy things move移动的意思多一点吧 用carry吧 many你用得太多了 像a lot of/ lots of 或者其他同义词尽管用
还有你的文章同一句式用得太多了,都是He can .
比如it's easy for him to carry some heavy things
He is goood at playing basketball,also he play computer very well
He can do some housework,like washing clothes and cooking
Sometimes he buys gifts for me,so i like him very much.
I believe my dream will come true one day.这一句还好
你不要怪姐姐说了那么多,其实你的文章没什么错误,这点很好了.只是句式单一,以后你可以尝试从不同角度翻译句子 继续努力啊