请帮我看一下有什么问题,有没有语法错误,用词是否正确等,）

题目

请帮我看一下有什么问题,有没有语法错误,用词是否正确等,）
As is vividly demonstrated in the picture above,two handicapped young men are heading towards their destination with vigorous strides,leaving all their crutches behind.The hardship disability being no longer an obstacle on their journey,they support each other with firm hands and proceed steadily.What is conveyed in the picture reflects a common sense and is most thought-provoking.
The main purpose of the painter can be interpreted in terms of cooperation and teamwork.To begin with,the sense of cooperation must be cultivated among us.With the development of society and economy,the pressure and stress of competition between us become more and more fierce.If we want to complete our work effectively and efficiently in this busy,modern world,we must all learn to cooperate with each other.What’s more,there is no doubt that cooperation is as important as other factors contributing to one’s success.Without cooperation,we may undergo repeated failures in whatever we do.Meanwhile,the spirit of cooperation and teamwork benefits both our social harmony and each individual.And sincere cooperation will surely-bring us the prosperity of a nation.
Accordingly,on no account can we ignore the importance of cooperation and teamwork.We should spare no effort to cooperate with each other so as to properly meet these unavoidable life challenges.Only in this way can we achieve great success in the competitive world.

答案

here your english is better than most of us,who can really help you?this seems a tofel writing exam,and i can't find any problem in your article.good job.