求问这些英语语段中是否有语法错误

题目

求问这些英语语段中是否有语法错误
还有希望能改进一下
英语语段
In the 1940s,acaptain from the USA ,he liked to eatthe Fried bread when he was boy .But one day ,he found the bread isn’tcooked enough ,and his mother cut off
the central part of the bread,andfried again.Hefound the bread in fried become tastier,sothe hollow fried bread ——donut was born.
There was a DonutShop
named BIG APPLE at Yuanrong
Times Square .It’s the biggest Donut Shop in
Suzhou .And it is my first time eating donut .There were many kinds of donuts
likechocolate,peanut,matcha,almond…
And
sometimes
I go there with my mother
or my
friends
to have some donuts there .And soon the donut was finished.
At this summertime ,we ,went to
buy some donuts by the way after shopping as usual .But when we got to there
,the shop wasn’t be there any more .Maybe it was close
down
because of the continued loss.
We felt a little unhappy and had
a sense
of lose
/w\.
10月25日前

答案

In the 1940s,a captain from the USA,he liked to eat the Fried (fried 不用大写) bread when he was boy .But one day,he found the bread (isn’t 过去式用 wasn't) cooked enough ,and his mother cut off the central part of the bread,and fried again.He found the (bread in fried 是 fried bread) become(过去式became) tastier,so the hollow fried bread ——donut was born.
There was a DonutShop named BIG APPLE (at 改为 in) Yuanrong Times Square .It’s the biggest Donut Shop in Suzhou.(去掉And) it (is 过去式 was) my first time eating donut .There were many kinds of donuts like chocolate,peanut,matcha,almond…
(去掉And) sometimes I go there with my mother or my friends to have some donuts there .And soon the (donut was 是 donots were) finished.
(去掉At) this summertime ,we went to buy some donuts by the way after shopping as usual .But when we got to there,the shop wasn’t (去掉be) there any more .Maybe it was close down because of (the 改为 they were making) continued loss.We felt a little unhappy and had a sense of (加 feeling) lose.
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