这篇雅思作文能拿多少分,

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这篇雅思作文能拿多少分,
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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work,job satisfaction is an improtant element of individual wellbing,
What factors contribute to job satisfaction?
How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?
Job satisfaction is widely concerned in today’s society.I maintain that there are three significant elements contribute to job satisfaction---- job security,sense of fulfillment,and equatable payment.
Job security is the moste vital factor,I think.The sense of stable contributes towards job satisfaction,while the unemployment rate still stays high in most of the countries,especially in the developing countries.Taking a comparatively steady job renders the employee feel pleasant.
Sense of fulfillment is important not only during the work,but also in our daily lives.This kind of sense will make the workers identify themselves as contributable persons or valuable persons.That helpful for the job satisfacti

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