New concept Englsh 2 ,第19课 摘要写作.求英语前辈们点评一下.

题目

New concept Englsh 2 ,第19课 摘要写作.求英语前辈们点评一下.
The play was going to begin at any moment.I asked for two tickets.There were not any left.Susan and me were disappointed.A man hurried to the ticket-office just then.He returned two tickets.They were for next Wednesday’s performance.I bought them.

答案

1,别总是用一种句式,尤其全部都是简单句.2,尝试着用一些从句或多一些表情感的词语类,可以让句子更丰富更富有情感.3,句子之间试着用一些连词衔接,这样上下句子意思会更连贯第三句有点小错误：But there isn't any tic...