英语作文,帮我看看这是作文中的一段话,帮我稍微改改,有什么语法问题请指出,作文是关于邀请信的,

题目

英语作文,帮我看看这是作文中的一段话,帮我稍微改改,有什么语法问题请指出,作文是关于邀请信的,
we hold this party.For one thing,that day is the birthday of our tutor and we will invite him also at that time ;for another thing,we would like to get together ,before the graduation and leaving of each.
还有这段话开始的we hold this party怎么融入到整个句子

答案

如果主要是说明举办聚会的原因,就这么改好了
One reason why we are holding the party is to celebrate the birthday of our tutor,who will also be invited to it; another is that we'd like to get together before graduation when we part from each other.
还有别的信息要写进去吗