请为下面雅思作文打分分析原因作文没有写完,因为确实写不下去了作文题目是剑桥雅思真题3 第一套题的TASk2

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请为下面雅思作文打分分析原因作文没有写完,因为确实写不下去了作文题目是剑桥雅思真题3 第一套题的TASk2
Nowadays many popular international activities just like the world cup and ATP held on the world.Under this circumstances,easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way has become an essential part of our worlds.While some people thinks hold the events cannot ease international tensions and release patriotic emotions.I prefer supporting on the contrary.My arguments for this point are listed as follows.
While the events was holding in the world,the world's people was gathered to the same place to let myself relaxed.Take the world cup for example.In 2010,all over the world's people from every corner of the world to the South Africa.They are holding together to celebrated the games opening.In that moment,there not had racial discrimination,not different culture,not war.People can relaxed their heart during the games.They were able to came to the bar,drank the beer simultaneous cheer for their country's team.It can got the happy from this events.

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In my humble opinion,我觉得大概就5.5吧,虽然用了好多句型和复杂词汇,你不觉得生搬硬套的很变扭么.词用的好多都不太恰当,也很变扭.