帮忙批改两篇作文,看有什么错误或需要修饰、修改的地方.

题目

帮忙批改两篇作文,看有什么错误或需要修饰、修改的地方.
1.Success
Everyone gets the itch to succeed,but only part of them can make their dreams come true.You maybe wonder:what is the key to success?The answer is “To keep the desire to learn”.
Keep the desire to learn,and you will never be satisfied with what you have known.Always keep a curious mind to all the mysterious parts of the world.Keep the desire to learn,and whatever difficulties you face,the strong belief will support you in solving the problems.Nothing in the world is to be feared,it is only to be understand.So everything is possible if we try our best and never give up.
One who does not have the desire to learn will never reach their goals.They are always shortsighted and are easily be satisfied with the very little thing they have known.In fact,knowledge,just like the ocean,never has a rim.Whenever and wherever you are,you should remember:what you are learning is only the surface.
2.Language Learning
Learning a language is easy.Even a child can do it!But how to learn a language well is a question.
According to my experience,I think we should follow the following steps.
First of all,reading is the key to success.Read as much as you can,such as newspapers in the new language is a good choice.While we are reading,Don't translate,try to think in the new language.
Finally,successful language learning is active learning.We can't wait a chance to use the language,we should look for such a chance.If we can find people who speak the language and ask these people to correct us when we make a mistake.The level of our language will improving speedly.
It is necessary that steps should be taken to raise our language learning.If we can stand on it,we will success!
保持在四级水平就行!

答案

Everyone gets the itch to succeed,but only part of them can make their dreams come true.You maybe wonder:what is the key to success?The answer is “To keep the desire to learn”.
Keep the desire to learn,and you will never be satisfied with what you have known.Always keep a curious mind to all the mysterious parts of the world.Keep the desire to learn,and whatever difficulties you(are) (faced),the strong belief will support you in solving the problems.Nothing in the world is to be feared,(but) it is only to be understand.So everything is possible if we try our best and never give up.
One who does not have the desire to learn will never reach their goals.They are always shortsighted and are easily be satisfied with the very little thing they have known.In fact,knowledge,just like the ocean,never has a rim.Whenever (it is)and wherever you are,you should remember:what you (have lernt)is only the surface.
2.Language Learning
Learning a language is easy.Even a child can do it!But how to learn a language well is a question.
According to my experience,I think we should follow the following steps.
First of all,reading is the key to success.Read as much as you can,such as newspapers in the new language (such as 后加名词,不加句子).While we are reading,don't translate,try to think in the new language.
Finally,successful language learning is active learning.We can't wait (for)a chance to use the language,we should look for such a chance.If we can find people who speak (this) language ,(缺了主句)(we can)ask these people to correct us when we make (mistakes).The level of our language will (improve) speedly.
It is necessary that steps should be taken to raise our language learning.If we can stand on it,we will success!