今天下午1点去比赛,我写了份自己介绍,要求一分钟以内.请英语厉害的人士帮我看看,有没有语病,

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今天下午1点去比赛,我写了份自己介绍,要求一分钟以内.请英语厉害的人士帮我看看,有没有语病,
Good afternoon,teachers.Glad to meet you .I am glad to introduce myself.My name is Gong Hongyu.I am twelve years old.I studu in Da Gang NO.5 Middle School.I have many frends in our school ,because I am a happy and sunny boy.They all kind to me and they want to be my friend.I have a lot of hobbies ,too.like:swimming,piay football,singsing.I always play football with friends on Sunday.If you give me a chance,I will make more programss.Thanks you .

答案

1.teachers不对,面试官不是老师啊~
2.Glad to meet you后又用Glad?你只会glad?不会换换别的,比如lucky~
3.不要每句一开始就是I am......别把自己放第一位,换个主语不行?
4.They all kind to me?没有be动词!
5.they want to be my friend?friends吧
6.Thanks you 有这个表达?