Children who are brought up in families which do not have a great amount of money are better prepare

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Children who are brought up in families which do not have a great amount of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents.Do you agree or disagree?
There is a perception that children raised in households not in possession a good fortune better prepared to deal with the problems in their adult years.My personal view is that children brought up by parents of low or middle economic status are conditioned early on in their lives to exercise self—control and self-restraint.
Children live in a not wealthy home ,their always have a wish go beyond their parents’ for they have a strong motive power to create a wonderful future.Hence these children,for the most part,are apt treasure every occupation and scrimping.Undoubtedly,they understand the meaning of fortune than live in well-to-do home children.Consequently,they end up being better able to manage stress in their adult years and less likely to panic or get daun

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There is a perception that children raised in households do not possess a good fortune or better prepared to deal with the problems in their adult years.My personal view is that children brought up by parents of low or middle economic status are conditioned early on in their lives to exercise self—control and self-restraint.
Children live in a poor family ,always have a wish to go beyond their parents’ as they have a strong motive to create a wonderful future.Hence,these children,for the most part,are apt treasure every occupation and scrimping.Undoubtedly,they understand the meaning of fortune than those who live in well-to-do home.Consequently,they end up being better able to manage stress in their adult years and are less likely to be panic or get daunted when problems occur.Besides,when children want to buy toy but have not enough allowance who will savvy in doing part-job.So these children know that they must to be “earned”if you want to receive a present,above all ,requiring success must put forth great effort.
On the other hand,children who were brought up in families which have a great amount of money,have more confidence to face stranger.In the new millennium,communication skills had been become a significant technique so these children are more likely to adapt to social life.Furthermore,wealthy people have a huge advantage that they have good economic environment when they will be fired they have time to relax their bodies and ease their minds to deal with everything.
In conclusion,i once again restate my view that environmental of poverty is more conducive to children’ growth.Hard environment will educate children what is reality life and how to effort to pursue their dreams.
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