刚写了一份英语简历,请看看这段有那些错误

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刚写了一份英语简历,请看看这段有那些错误
TNC co.,JAPAN owned the wholly factory,it produces watchcases and fixes the TNC watch.When I working of the factory,my mostly job is used VISI-CAM and CNC,made new sample watchcases by the customers required appearance,contrived the new watchcase's design parameter and machining process and plot drawing.
I have participated in a discussion to advance productive efficiency.I given some reasonable advices,found the file of manage equipment and improved productivity.

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TNC co.,JAPAN owns the wholly factory,and it produces watchcases and fixes the TNC watch.When I worked for the factory,most parts of my job are using VISI-CAM and CNC,making new sample watchcases by the customers required appearance,contriving the new watchcase's design parameter and machining process and plot drawing.
I have participated in a discussion to advance productive efficiency.I gave some reasonable advices,foundeded the files of manage equipment and improved productivity.