哪位大神帮我改改英语作文,我大二.

题目

哪位大神帮我改改英语作文,我大二.
The Traffic Jam
Nowerdays, more and mord people have their own cars . Beyond all question ,private cars bring about a lot
convenience.But despite the great convenience it brings about ,we find the serious problems it makes,the
traffic jam.
With more and more private cars in the roads,the traffic jam has became a inevitable problem.To make things worse ,a lot of drivers who don't obey the traffic rules make this problem worse.They run
the red light ,drive under the influnce of alcohol and so forth.
To solve this problem ,we can encourge people take public transport meas and take serious punishment for those who violate the traffica rules .In my view, if we all exert oursleves for the traffic jam ,this problem can be easy solved.

答案

Should be 'Nowadays' a lots of people are having their own cars.
The word 'but' should not be the first word
exp.But despite the great convenience it brings about ,we find the.
Maybe make it like this,Beyond all the questions,having own cars might be more convenient but it does cause some problems too,such as traffic congestion.
With the increasing number of cars on the road,traffic jam has become a inevitable problem.To make things worse,a lots of driver who do not obey the traffic rules such as rushing to the red light.
lol sorry I dont think I can any of this any more.Things up there were what I could do.