6级作文片段一篇,请大家帮我看看,语法,时态

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6级作文片段一篇,请大家帮我看看,语法,时态
Having stayed in campus for years,some students start to thinking about what they can do after graduate .
For instance,a part of them urgent to work after graduate .perhaps they look forward to a new life,obviously they are curious about this,and they even already boring with studying at school also some of them want to earn money as soon as possible.
Meanwhile,the other part of them planning on taking part in the entrance exams for postgraduate school .they hope to stay in campus continue .probably the society outside school perilous for them and afraid of finding a job .since they choose to get a higher degree at school.
In my opinion ,I tend to get a higher degree abroad after graduate.Because a bachelor` s degree can hardly qualify students for a competitive position,and go abroad could exercise me also I know my choice will mean a commitment of time and money,but it would surely lead to a prosperous future.

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