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In many countries,workers over 60 can still be found in the workplace.However,some people think it may cause some social problems and they should get retired.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays,the average age of populations in the entire world is raising up gradually,in some countries,government adopts schemes such as upward the standard age of retire to maintain the productivity output.However some sociologists claim that elder employees take many potential risks to the society,and they approve to retire the people who over 60 but still working.Under the argument i believe that a negative influence will coming to our society promptly if we decide to retire them at all.
The reason lead to scarce fresh productivity in the new century marketing due to the limitation of regeneration of birth in the largest population of country in the world--China.As the common recognitions that although China has the 1/5 population of world,many evidences pro

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average age -> average life expectancy or with an aging population in many countries around the world.upward retire age -> raise the retirement agetake many potential risks to the society->create pres...