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高手帮忙看看这篇英语作文~有没有语法错误啥的
Anne Frank is a Jewish girl.She lived inAmsterdam in the Netherlands.She was passed away at the age of 16 in theconcentration camp.Only 16years old!Her family was Jewish so they had to hide.If they didn’t hide,they will be caught by the German Nazis.She and her family being hide away since July 1942,and they hide in a very small room for more two years until they were discovered by German Nazis Party.Anne wants a friend whom she can tell anything to “her”.So she choose her diary as her best friend.She calls her best friend Kitty.

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She and her family being hide away since July 1942注意be动词的问题,这里应该是一个过去完成时吧,应该是She and her family had hide away since July 1942,第二,and they hide in a very small room for more tw...