求高手帮忙改这篇雅思作文并评论指导~拜托拜托~

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求高手帮忙改这篇雅思作文并评论指导~拜托拜托~
Topic: Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Advertising compaign increasingly become the decisive factor for companies to sell products.The managers often perceive that the more money they put in, the more profit they can get. This tiggered a heated debate about whether popular goods reflect the power of advertisement or the real need of consumers.
Some people argue that products regularly seen on TV create a larger pubilicity thus result in more sales volume than the others. And people will pursue for their favorite stars that are printed in the product without concerning for whether they need it or not. However,others hold the view that most people will buy the necessities rather than what the advertisements pusuade them to purchase.
In my point of view, best-selling products include both provis

答案

写得挺好的啊,按照雅思作文的格式来了嘛～　就是有点chinglish还有点逻辑小问题,不影响大分数～