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英语翻译
聂海胜,男,湖北枣阳人.1964年9月出生,1983年6月参军,1986年12月入党.1998年1月成为我国首批航天员之一.2005年10月12日,聂海胜乘坐"神舟''六号飞船飞向太空.10月17日,他们安全返回地面.聂海胜有一个幸福的家庭

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on September 1964
这么明显的错误也犯?
只有说到年月日才用on,其他年或年月或月都用in的啊
哎,我的译文是：
Nie Haisheng, male, from Zaoyang City, Hubei Province, was born in September 1964. Nie joined the army in June 1983 and turned into a Communist Party member in December 1986. He became one of China's first batch astronauts in January 1998. On October 12th 2005, Nie Haisheng flew to the outer space by taking "Shenzhou" VI spacecraft. And on October 17th, he with his companions landed back to the earth safely. Nie has a happy family.