我是个初中生,老师布置一篇英语作文,是有关"中国梦,我的梦",我试着写了一篇,但总觉得不太好,请指教并改正

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我是个初中生,老师布置一篇英语作文,是有关"中国梦,我的梦",我试着写了一篇,但总觉得不太好,请指教并改正
Everyone has a dream.For our motherland ,the largest dream is to make its effort to become stronger and more beautifulin the world.As a middle school student,I also have a dream.My dream is tobecome an astronaut in the future..When I was a little child,I became interestedin science and space.I read a lot of books about science and space.I admirethe astronauts for their courage and achievement and I dreamed of walking inspace one day.But I know my dream won’t come true unless I do my best .So Imake up my mind to learn as much as possible at school.As the saying goes ,“Whereis a will,there is a way”,I believe I will achieve my dream as long as Istick to my goal.I hope I will make a contribution to realizing China’s dream.

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中央精神贯彻的也太快了吧.中国梦立刻就上来啦.我觉得有改动的句子用括号括出来了.（你后面写国家和自己就不能用everyone做主语了,换一种说法较好 ）For our motherland ,the largest dream is to make its effort t...