写了一篇简单的英语作文,请大家看看有什么语法错误和一些不好的地方,指出并说明原因.3Q!

题目

写了一篇简单的英语作文,请大家看看有什么语法错误和一些不好的地方,指出并说明原因.3Q!
Hello,everybody!My name is Lucy.I'm thirteen years old .I'm going to middle school in September.I like playing badminton and watching TV.But I like reading books best.I read books every day.I read and the other magazines in Summer Holiday.There're five people in my home.My parents,grandparents and I.This Monday,we went to Changzhou.We feel very happy.

答案

“I'm going to middle school in September” in 改成this 表示今年九月我就读初中啦
"I like reading books best" best 不对,应用most,这里表达的是比较之中的最高级.
“the other magazines”,the other是特指,但是后文有没有列明具体书名,所以应用泛指,改成“some other magazines”
“in Summer Holiday” in 改成during,因为是一段时间内.
“There're five people in my home” home改成family,home表示的是家,但是family表示家庭,跟后面比较相比配
“There're five people in my home.My parents,grandparents and I” 第二句是对第一句中5 people的展开描述,所以这两句表达一个完整语义,应该是一句话.将第一句的句号改成逗号.
“This Monday,we went to Changzhou” 英语习惯与中文不同,状语应该在后,所以应该改成“We went to Changzhou this monday”
"We feel very happy" 改成 “we were very happy” 更加自然,符合一般习惯
 

很多不是语法问题,是英文的习惯,所以楼主可能需要多看一下原文书籍,熟悉一下就好啦.