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新写了一盘托福作文,恳求各位帮忙看看哪里有语法错误!
As we all know,professional athletes nowadays are commonly receiving decent salaries which are greatly higher than average earnings.However,whether those athletes really deserve such a good pay,the answer of many people may be negative,because they believe that athlete is just a normal occupation and it is unfair to other people if athlete’s salary is so much higher than average.But to be frank,I actually believe that professional athletes indeed deserve the salaries that they are paid.I would like to present the following two points to support my belief.
First of all,it takes more time of training to become a professional athlete than other occupation needs.For example,it usually needs more than ten years of basketball practicing and great talent to become a basketball player in NBA; furthermore,it would take even more effort to become a sports star such as Michael Jordan and David Beckham.Besides,athletes also withstand greater pressure than normal

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