请英语达人帮我看下别人帮我更改的作文还有什么问题么

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请英语达人帮我看下别人帮我更改的作文还有什么问题么
本人不太懂什么语法之类的问题,如果能全部帮我整理一遍就更加感谢了!谢谢Thank my parents for giving my life.They're so diligent that they are keeping on working all day long in order to make a living.And they're so selfless that they always offer all good things for me.Parents have made all they can do to help me grow.
treat my parents wiith a grateful and a sincere heart .Don't take for granted that parents should do anything to help us,.That they took us to this beautiful world is great enough.Our parenting adults,do not ask our parents for anything any longer,we should stop blindly to demand them to pay,Thanks for giving it,thank parents for their bit by bit.
When I am happy,they would share my happiness with me,my parents are the people who love me best,so I have no excuse not to love them.
I will try my best,I want to see the smile in their eyes.I love them forever

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Express my thanks to my parents for giving me life.They're so diligent,in order to make a living,they keep on working all day.And they're so selfless that they always offer all good things for me but leaving few things for they own.Parents have made all they can do to help me grow well.Thank you,mom and dad.Thanks for your pay,thanks for everthing you did for me,whatever small one or important one.
Treat my parents gratefully and sincerely.Don't take parents' pay for granted.It is parents that took us to this beautiful world,which is really great enough.Now,we have been grown-up,we shouldn't ask our parents for anything more.We should stop blindly demanding them to pay.
Make them happier.When I am happy,they will be much happier than me,while I am sad,they will let me calm down and cheer up.My parents are the people who love me best,so I have no excuse not to love them.I will try my best to make them happy,I want to see the smile in their eyes.
Mom,dad,I love you forever.
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