英语高手帮我看看我这有什么错误吗

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英语高手帮我看看我这有什么错误吗
Today,i readed a theme,it told me lot of information about ' The Memory Palace'(记忆宫殿）,i had tried build a room in my ' Palace' and put something what I want to remenber in there and made them scary to me,they will be easy to remember to me.But,I'm wrong.That really not a better way to remember something until I known that will make me crazy,because I don't want change them what I want to remember to something scary to me.But,if u Really Really Really want to remember something,like some knowledges in your books,your don't want to remember them but you must do it,you can try to use' The Memory Palace' ,it is really a preffect way to remember something what you don't want to remember.
自己翻译的中文：今天我读了一个话题,他给我介绍了关于“记忆宫殿”的事.我试着在我的宫殿里建了一个房间,放一些我在这里想记住的一些事情并且使他们对于我很恐惧,这会使我容易记住.但是我错了,直到我感觉他会使我疯狂我才觉得他不是记住事情得很好方法.因为我不想将那些我想记住的事变成我所畏惧的,但是如果你确实确实确实想记住一些事情,像你课本中的一些知识,你不想记但必须得记住,你可以尝试去用这个“记忆宫殿”.他是记住你不想记住的事情的一个很容易的很棒的办法.
重点是看一下时态有没有问题,我说今天发生过的事能用过去式吗

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Today,i read a theme,it told me a lot of information about ' The Memory Palace'(记忆宫殿）,i had tried to build a room in my ' Palace' and put something I want to remember there and made them scary to me,which will be easy for me to remember.However,I'm wrong.I just find it is not a good way to memorize until they drive me crazy.As I don’t want to turn things I want to memorize into something that is scary to me,but if you do want to remember something ,such as the knowledge from books which you are not willing to remember but you do,you can try this ' The Memory Palace'.It is really an easy and great method to remember those you don’t want to remember.
给你重新改了下
顺便提一下：第一,注意时态,你的时间是很明确的是：today,那么用一般现在时就好了；
第二,注意一些常见动词的用法,比如try to do sth
第三,定语从句的用法,不能用what 引导,something 后只能用that遇到that在从句中做宾语的可以省略
第四,英语中表示强调,在动词前加do就好了,（根据时态变化又是用did）不需要加三个副词
第五,there,here等副词前不用加上介词.
学英语还是多念,多写,慢慢来.我觉得多念很重要,因为念多了,自己的语感会加强的,很多东西会融会贯通,多写就是对多念的一个实践.加油哦~