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托福作文求评分
Topic72 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Grades (marks) encourage students to learn.Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It has been a long time for teachers to use grades to encourage students to learn.Frankly speaking,I do not think this method works.Grades,on the contrary,may actually discourage students’ passion in learning.The reasons I used to illustrate my point of view will be given in the rest of the passage.
Nowadays,students have so much pressure from their everyday life and those who received low grades in the subjects will have much more pressure since parents will be likely to compare their grades with those of their classmates.So these students will have so much pressure on them that they may lose the interests in learning and learning has become a burden to them.As a result,these students may probably fall behind in their class and will no longer care their grades at all.
Moreover,grades may have counter

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结尾过于简短,结尾需要重申总论点和分论点,大概22分的样子