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社会（老建筑拆除）
Topic:Some people think that old buildings in cities should be destroyed and make room for new ones.Is it important to preserve old buildings?Do they stand in the way of progress of cities?
These days,it seems quite common that many old buildings are protected by historic trusts and international organizations.Yet,there remains some disagreement as to whether those old buildings should be demolished for the sake of urban development or not.Perhaps surprisingly,however,the protection of old building is still very important.
First of all,old buildings especially those with a long history and unique architecture(we call them historic buildings in this essay)should be safeguarded.Regardless of costly spending involved here,most of us indeed have benefited greatly as the existence of historic buildings.Specificallly,historic buildings as a physical link to our past and our ancestors,afford individuals both the sense of belonging and

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老房子包含的范围非常广,直接入手很可能会有困难.那么从拆还是不拆的角度看,老房子可以分成几大类呢?明显是两大类：应该拆的和不应该拆的.所以全文写四段
PARA1 introduction 背景介绍,现在城市里老房子很多.人们对是否拆掉有争议（There are a vast number of old structures in cities today.Whether they should be demolished is a controversial issue.)
PARA2 提出一些老房子应该拆,分论点可以写两点：比如老房子不安全（unsafe）或者影响市容（spoil the cityscape）
PARA3 另外一些老房子应该拆.这一段可以写三个分论点,如分成有特殊历史意义的老房子（buildings of historical value）,非常漂亮的老房子（gorgeous historical buildings）和特殊的民居（unique ethnic architecture）等等
PARA4 conclusion 结论：有些老房子由于城市发展必须拆掉,但是有特殊价值的不能拆,反而应该有效的保护（should be effectively preserved）.
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