求改英语作文,看看哪些地方错误,改进的

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求改英语作文,看看哪些地方错误,改进的
It is universally acknowledge that economy is traditional virtue , the truth of it is self-evident , while most of people have formd unrealistic picture of economy , they disregard the importance of it without being conscious that thay are doing anything immoral .
Nowadays , economy is playing an unprecedental part in our daily life and exerting great influence on our next generation , though our economic level , to some extent , have been improved greatly , yet our achievement is at the cost of overdue of consumption of material resources , besides , an increasing mass of people come to realize the influence of economy since there are limited rescouses can be exploited . which has become a sort of threat to the survival of our human .
Considering all the above-mentioned , in my conception , lt is long-time tradition in chinnese culture that we should attach great importance to economy , and never have we enjoyed so much prosperity with so little worries

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It is universally acknowledge (改为acknowledged )that economy is traditional virtue ,the truth of it ( 改为which )is self-evident ,while most of people have formd unrealistic picture of economy ,they disregard the importance of it without being conscious that thay are doing anything immoral .
Nowadays ,economy is playing an unprecedental part in our daily life and exerting great influence on our next generation ,though our economic level ,to some extent ,have( 改为has) been improved greatly ,yet our achievement is at the cost of overdue of consumption of material resources ,besides ,an increasing mass of people come to realize the influence of economy since there are limited rescouses (加上that/which)can be exploited .which has become a sort of threat to the survival of our human .
Considering all the above-mentioned ,in my conception ,lt is long-time tradition in chinnese culture that we should attach great importance to economy ,and never have we enjoyed so much prosperity with so little worries ,and it is high time we did something helpful and constructive for our next generation.