请各位帮我修改一下我练的第一篇 托福作文

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请各位帮我修改一下我练的第一篇 托福作文
满分30 但是是按照5分评分的 我这个大概几分呢··
水平有限.
是关于大城市还是农村更适合孩子的成长
Big city or countryside,which is better for children to grow up in?
It goes without saying that we hope our children have a happy and significant childhood.No matter big city or countryside,both of them can provide a good circumentance for children’s growth.But when it comes to question,which is better for children to grow up in?big city or countiyside?People hold differernt views on this issue.For my perspective,taking all aspects into consideration,big city obviously much better than countryside.My views will list as follows.
One of the primary causes is education conditions,big city have better education resources than countryside,which can provide more chances for children to accept a superior education that countryside can not.A prime example of this is perfect education circumantance such as teachers,universities and art training schools,to name just a few.Those resourses can hardly

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满分30 但是是按照5分评分的 我这个大概几分呢··水平有限.虚心请教.是关于大城市还是农村更适合孩子的成长Big city or countryside,which is better for children to grow up in?It goes without saying that we h...