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Topic:Some people think sending criminals to prison is not an effective way to deal with them.Education and training are better.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Today,global society has been experiencing a great increase in criminal activity of nearly every kind,especially the astonishing rising rate of juvenile delinquency.In the meantime,however,the methods to punish or to save the criminals has sparked much debate.Some people insist the traditional solution which is that the police put them into prisons for a long time,while others assert that education and training are effective ways to reduce crimes.Personally,I believe that both ways should be combined organically to implement because they both have merits and shortcomings.
On the one hand,one of solutions to punish the criminals is to send them to prisons is necessary.Firstly,if someone commits a crime,like robbing or theft,they must get less social responsibilities.As for this phenomenon,these o

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挺好的~跟据我周围同学考出的分数为参考~差不多6.5-7分吧结构清晰,观点明确,用词丰富.英语方面,也没法改什么了~但是,有个问题其实我想说下,无关英语.就是这个题目,他想讨论的其实是当今世界普遍使用的两种刑罚体系,...