英语好的哥哥姐姐帮忙看看我的自我介绍语法对不对!...

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英语好的哥哥姐姐帮忙看看我的自我介绍语法对不对!...
本人英语不是很好,马上上学要用!、、、、
Hello everybody
My name is Jin Shixi
I'm 13 years old
I like singing and drawing
I'm good at drawing and many of my drawings have won prizes
My favorite colour is sapphire blue
My favorite music group is Super Junior,their songs are fascinating And i'm a happy and talented girl
I am very happy to come here to study with you
I hope you can like me
And I can become you friend soon
Thank you very much!

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1,I'm good at drawing and many of my drawings have won prizes有语法错误 改为：I'm good at drawing and I have won prizes for many of my drawings/pictures.2,I hope you can like me And I can become you f...