剑桥7 test1 大作文,求大神改一改

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剑桥7 test1 大作文,求大神改一改
One of the burning problems facing our society is whether some children are born with talent while others are not or any child can be taught to be good at something.Different opinions will be showed as follows.
Some people support that talent are given randomly and it has nothing to do with the later education.Actually our character is designed by our gene to some extend so that different people have unique advantages.But gene never speaks.If we want to know the secrete of ourselves,we need a special tool,which is now called education.Therefore later education is just a method to find out what children are really good at.
Then other people hold a view that practice makes perfect.Sometimes hardworking can make up for your shortcomings and even help you become outstanding.And the purpose of education is to make people better trained and skilled.
However in my opinion both sides have convincing reasons.We are born with strongpoint and disadvantages and

答案

One of the burning problems facing our society is whether some children are born with talent while others are not or any child can be taught to be good at something.Different opinions will be showed as follows.
Some people support that talent (is) given randomly and it has nothing to do with the later education.Actually our character is designed by our gene to some extend (so) different people have unique advantage(and disadvantages) .But gene never speaks.If we want to know the secrete of ourselves,we need a special tool,which is now called education.Therefore later education is just a method to find out what children are really good at.
Then other people hold a view that practice makes perfect.Sometimes hardworking can make up for your shortcomings and even help you become outstanding.And the purpose of education is to make people better trained and skilled.
(However,) in my opinion both sides have convincing reasons.We are born with (strong points) and disadvantages and some will keep company with us for our whole life.But (it) doesn’t mean we have no chance to change (them).In other words,we can make efforts to make up for what we are not satisfied and (strengthen) our advantages.I (think) great people (are those) with innate talent and continuous hardworking.
All in all,the issue is still （arguable) and we can’t figure out (which) is more resonable.Although we can’t choose our talent,we can be serious about the later study and try our best to be more talented.