帮我看看这篇英语文章有语病吗

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帮我看看这篇英语文章有语病吗
Dear jenny
I have heared you had some problems with your parents on whether you can watch TV or not.Don't worry my friend,let me give you a hand.
You could have a peaceful talk with your parents.Try to tell them that TV brings a lot of useful imformation to you and watching TV for a short time isn't a waste of time.At the same time you could make a study plan and promise to your parents you will stduy hard.I believe you can deal with it perfectly,will you And wish you good luck.

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当然有啊,第一句就有大问题,过去完成时,是表示过去所发生的事而对现在已经产生影响了,
have a peaceful talk with your parents,have 本身就是动词,而后面却是个动词词组.
time isn't a waste of time,waste是动词,不可以用a来修饰.
"At the same time"后面应有逗号
could make a study ,could make study,三个动词可以这样连吗?"you could making a studing
promise to your parents 后面缺一个宾语
I believe后面缺宾语