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题目:Some people believe the function of a building is more important than its exterior.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
The construction of urbanization is advancing at a staggering speed in this day and age. A vast number of structures have been emerging in the urban area.However, some people think we should focus on the practicability of a building rather than its appearance.Personally,I agree with their view,but I would quality it to some extent.
It is manifest that the development of modern cities,both in population size and in functionality,necessitates the construction of multi-functional high-rise buildings.To start with, given that almost all the present-day cities are already packed with places of residence,commerce and recreation and the land available for the further development of cities is increasingly scarce,new construction must b proposed and carried out to accommodate the markedly-increasing urban

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那就我了!
给我悬赏分吧
虽然我懂英语
但就会几句~
第一句：很多人们都喜欢比较特殊的建筑物…………后头不知道了,