求雅思高人来看看我这篇雅思大作文估计可以多少分

题目

求雅思高人来看看我这篇雅思大作文估计可以多少分
Modern games are better for developing a wide range of skills for children than traditional games.Do you agree or disagree?
文章
Along with the development of the society ,a number of the problem are brought to our attention,one of which that the game to child the influence,such as modern game and traditional games.To alleviate this problem.Some people claim that the modern game are better for developing a wide rage of skills for children,Whereas other people hold the view that the traditional game limit the ability of the children.
Before presenting my own point of view I will first take a closer examination of each aforementioned perspective.It certainly obvious that the traditional game with no need for large brain skills.As a matter of fact the traditional games have positive effects on participants’ physical fitness,because they demand a large amount of body movements.But we cannot deny the significance of another factor involved in this issue

答案

个人感觉6-6.5分,6分是很稳的.不知道能不能得6.5