请改一句话：

题目

请改一句话：
My experience in this line of work includes three years as a salesman in a small local company.
我想可改成：
I have some relevant working experiences in this line of work,which includes my working as a salesman for a small local company for three years.
但是不确定,请大侠们帮忙

答案

你这样改没问题,如果实在要挑,建议把第一个working (relevant working experiences中)去掉,跟后面的my working as稍显重复.