初三英语作文,求批改.批改的话最好能改成初中水平,不要改的太高深了,

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初三英语作文,求批改.批改的话最好能改成初中水平,不要改的太高深了,
As we know,studying is student's duty.If you want do your favorite work,First you have to work hard.And then you should get a good grade.Finally,your dream will come true while you growing up.Although some people think it's unfair to these poor students.But I think these poor students will get good-work's change in the future.

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As we all known,it's our students' duty to study hard.Only by hard studing and high grads you can take our favorite job and then your dream will come ture easily while we are growing up.While some peo...