英语不好,大家帮我修改一下英语作文啊

题目

英语不好,大家帮我修改一下英语作文啊
下面这个是新概念2的原文.
I have just received a letter from my brother,Tim.He is in Australia.He has been there for six months.Tim is an engineer.He is working for a big firm and he has already visited a great number of different places in Australia.He has just bought an Australian car and has gone to Alice Springs,a small town in the centre of Australia.He will soon visit Darwin.From there,he will fly to Perth.My brother has never been abroad before,so he is finding this trip very exciting.
课文要求我回答问题将答案组成段落,不能超过50个单词
下面这个是我写的
Tim is an engineer,he was been there for six months.He has gone to Australian and he finding this trip very exciting,he is enjoying his trip very much.Tim has already visited many places ,he is in Alice Springs now.But Tim even been abroad before.
= = 我数了一下,53个词了,而且我整理出来的作文几乎是照着原文抄… 顺便看看有没有错误的地方.
对比一下两个句子，模仿例句完成以下练习
eg：The bell is ringing The bell has just rung
1.he is having breakfast
我改的：He has just have breakfast

答案

将答案组成段落是什么意思?是将原文简写吗?我把你的“删”改了一下.Tim is an engineer who has been in Australia for six months.Tim have never been abroad before（个人觉得这句提前至此更好些）.Now he is enj...