谁帮我检查下我的英文简历对不对?

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谁帮我检查下我的英文简历对不对?
Name:Wang Qiliang
Sex:Male
Folk:Han
Height:180cm
Health:Excellent
Birthday:March,1991
Political Status:League Member
Max.Degree:Technical secondary
Major:Car Decolaration
Post:Monitor
School Address:24#MinzhuStreet,Qingshi Road,Beitang Region,Wuxi city,Jiangsu procince
Home Address:16#Pizhou Road,Yunhe Region,Pizhou city,Jiangsu procince
Cell Phone:[phone]
Resident:Pizhou,Jiangsu,China
Rewards Events:
1.First Class 2007-2008 First team
2.Second Class 2007-2008 First team
3.Ten Class 2007-2008 Second team
4.“Excellent Secretary” of Students Union
5.“Campus Star” Recitation Contest
Intention:I’m willing to get a job which is related to my profession,and I will always expect to develop with the promotion of our company.
Self-evaluation:I’m a person who is energetic,enthusiastic and responsible towards my life and those who are around me .And I am always optimistic,even involved in trouble.At present,I have owned a great ability to organize any kind of activity whether it is complex or simple,and the ability to corporate.What’s more,I am able to adapt to a new surrounding quickly and well.I’m sure I’ll try my best to do my job.
帮我检查下

答案

Name:Qiliang Wang
Sex:Male
Folk:Han
Height:180cm
Health:Excellent
Date of birth:Mar 1991
Political Status:Youth League Member
Education:Secondary School of Technical
Major:Car Decolaration
Postiton in School:Monitor of a class
School Address:#24 Minzhu Lane,Qingshi Road,Beitang District,Wuxi city,Jiangsu province
Home Address:#16 Pizhou Road,Yunhe District,Pizhou city,Jiangsu province
Cell Phone:[phone]
Resident:Pizhou,Jiangsu,China
Rewards Events/Awards:
1.:Level 1
Time:2007-2008 First term
2.:Level 2 Time:2007-2008 First term
3.Level 10:Time:2007-2008 Second term
4.Price of Students Union's “Excellent Secretary”
5.Price of “Campus Star”for the School Recitation Contest
Objective:I am willing to get a job which is related to my studies,and I am also expecting to develop my experience with the developing of the company's business.
Self-evaluation:I am an energetic and enthusiastic person,and I have good ability to organize activities even they are complicated.I am always optimistic,even when I got in trouble.I am also a reliable person,and I am also have the ability to corporate with other team members.Even more,I am able to suit new environments quickly and well.I’m so sure that I am able to get my tasks done with high quality
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