一句句子的语法

题目

一句句子的语法
I would like to propose the alternative time for the interview of the accounting position which will be on 1/11.
I would like to propose the alternative time for the interview of the accounting position,which will be on 1/11.
以上两句的which能用来形容/代表alternative time吗?还是which跟在accounting position后所以就是形容/代表accounting position的?
Could I propose the alternative time for the interview on 1/11 at 9am?
这样表达算正确吗

答案

如果你愿意换种表达的话,我负责地跟你说,从句并非是交流中的王道,老外也并非那么愿意见到从句.
如果我用,我会写：
I would like to propose the alternative time for the interview of the accounting position.I think I prefer to arrange it on 1/11.
可以,可是你前面用propose后面也用~感觉上显得很重复~建议换个词,make或者arrange其实都可以表达到意思
还有,at 9am 放在on 1/11前面,英语永远是小在前大在后