麻烦哪位英语好的帮我看下下面这段英语有些什么语法错误,

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麻烦哪位英语好的帮我看下下面这段英语有些什么语法错误,
再在合适的地方加上英语“现在越来越多的人肥胖,运动是最好的减肥方式''.
People need to play sports because it is a good way of relaxing.When we are tired of work or study,we need to play football,basketball,table tennis and so on.It can not only rest our brains and eyes but also help build our bodies.I think it's really helpful to both our health and our study or work.Besides,It can help us make lots of new friends and communicate with each other well.What's more,it is good for teamwork when we play sports.And it can also make us feel comfortable and refreshed.

答案

help do sth 和 help to do sth 都可以.
没有语法错误,Good job!只是个人觉得Besides之后又来个了what's more,都是此外的意思,将what's more 改为last but not the least 如何?
建议将句子加在第二句,relaxing 之后,when之前
There are more and more poeple who have the problem of obesity and doing sports is the best way for them to lose weight.