这段英语有语法,

题目

这段英语有语法,
I evalue my account budget and find I'm short of money.I'm in great need of it.My mother has realized my financial embarrassment.And it's true.But I believe I'll get over it if I have found a job.It's very necessary.So I am hunting for a job immediately.My father adviced me to work as a bank clerk first.Due to my present situation,I'll find a job to earn money as soon as possible.
除此之外,再问下
“account budget ”是专有名词吗?可以这样用吗?
"I budget my financial case"这样有错吗？（我预算了下我的经济情况）

答案

当然有.日前不是已经帮你解决了类似问题了吗?还要写另一篇?
没有“account budget ”这个词,
最后一句可改为：I planned my budget in view of my financial situation.
全文可改为：When I did my own budgetary evaluation,I found I'm short of money.I'm in great need of it,in fact.My mother has realized my financial embarrassment.And it's true.But I believe I'll get over it if I can find a job.It's very necessary.So I am hunting for a job immediately.My father adviced me to work as a bank clerk first.Due to my present situation,I'll look for a job to earn money as soon as possible.