帮我看看这篇四级作文有什么问题?能拿多少分呢?

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帮我看看这篇四级作文有什么问题?能拿多少分呢?
Free Admission to Museums
More and more museums are free to people.What the objective for it In the first place,wecan acquaint ourself with the history .It expression our partriotism.In thesecond place,it enhance our spairtimes rich and colorful.
Howere,it also take some problems.On the one hand,museums is concerned about the safe of cultural relic.On the other hand it will make the profit decay.
In my opinion,i am in favor of the free admission.Yet i think that a respond for people.Only by learn more about the history can we succeed in doing everything in yhe future.In addition,only in this way we must free to museums in order that everybody can benefit from it.

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Howere,it also take some problems.On the one hand,museums is (are)concerned about the safe of cultural relic.On the other hand it will make the profit decay.Yet i think that a respond for people.不对o...