请帮我检查这篇英语作文的错误.

题目

请帮我检查这篇英语作文的错误.
As cultures meet and communicate with each other.More and more western festival have known by Chinese.
Many young people start to celebrate western festival for example Cristmas、Father`s Day、Mother`s Day.They think western festival is full of relative`s love,it makes many people relax and happy.celebrating western festival is very intersting without much money.So they like celebrate western festival.
Of course,the great majority think they are Chinese,so they should have deep love for traditional festival for example The Spring Festival、Tomb-sbveeping Day、the Mid-autumn Festival.But I think traditional festival is tiresome to so much ceremony.Celebrating traditional festival need much money.
It`s free to celebrate traditional festival or western festival,I think.They have each their advantages,and I can be equally happy with either.
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答案

英语里应该没有顿号吧,western festival用western festivals更好一点,第五行,relax是动词,改为relaxing,第六行like celebrate改成like celebrating,我就能改这些了