六级作文批改

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六级作文批改
请大家帮我修改下这篇六级作文,我词汇感觉不怎么丰富,所以表达的可能比较那什么,希望大家多提意见.该怎么改进我今后的作文?如果总分15分,可以得多少分呢?
The damage of public facilities
There has been a discussion about the damage of public facilities.It is obvious that it will affect people’s formal life.Additionally,precious resources of society will be wasted.It is crucial that effective actions should be taken to prevent the damage of public facilities.
To begin with,we should improve citizens’ sense of responsibility.That is because people are not aware of their actions will how harmful to other people.When public facilities are damaged,other people can hardly use them.That virtually brings about poor influences to people’s formal life.In addition,some rules can be put into practice.For instance,if someone damage public facility,he must pay for his action.Last but not least,we can reward the action which protect public facilities from being damaged,moreover make it known by people.Only by these measures can we prevent the damage of p

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.小学六年级写出这么强悍的文章.泪崩.,我看看The damage of public facilities(题目不是给出的吧,意思上有歧义,可理解成“对公共设施的破坏”,也可理解成“公共设施对...造成的破坏”,最好把of改成to吧)There has be...