谁来给我批改一下英语作文?急~~~~

题目

谁来给我批改一下英语作文?急~~~~
Everybody knows,the social intercourse is very important in student’s life.Some people think that the social intercourse is a bad idea every day.The reasons as the following;
1.The social intercourse will waste of time for the students.
2.The social intercourse will hurt the study.
Some people think that the social intercourse is a good idea every day.The reasons as the following:
1. Joining social intercourse can contact with lots of people.
2. Joining social intercourse can know lots of knowledge.
3. Joining social intercourse can bring happy.
I think that the students can join social intercourse,but they must join in vacation.It can’t waste of student’s time,and the students will have a good time.
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答案

Everybody knows【that】 the social intercourse is very important in 【students‘】 life.Some people 【believe（语言多变）】 that the social intercourse is 【a costum which will never receive the sanct...