谁能给孩子的英语短文以合适的修改?

题目

谁能给孩子的英语短文以合适的修改?
Last vacation I went to a beautiful beach,It was a very cool trip!
First day,On the beach,We were eating and drinking.We were very really happy and I was fond of this feeling!
Second day,The day was cool and I was very cold.Wo went to a beautiful mountain.I was very tired!
Third day,The day was very hot,so we went to a museum,It was king of boring,so I don't very enjoy it!

答案

Last vacation I went to a beautiful beach,which was a very cool trip.
Eating and drinking happily on the beach,I was so keen on this feeling.
After the first day came the second one.The weather was so cool that I felt very cold.And we went to a beautiful mountain.I was rather tired because of the climbing.
Finally,due to the hot weather,we went to a museum.But it was kind of boring.
In short,I didn't have a very good time during the trip.