英文求职信文法修改!

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英文求职信文法修改!
Dear Sir/Madam:
I have learned from the website that there is TheXXX,and I wish to apply for the position.
I have already graduated from XXX this year.I major Public administration and Policy.I had knowledge that how the company bulid relation with government and citizen.I also leaned about business manage,including human resource,management and maket research.Moreover,I interest that so much.
After school,I work for Office of Students Affairs of university.My major post include to handle routine paper work,assist supervisor on event organization and entertaining foreign guests.I leaning communicate skill and I konwing what the best of working attitude.In addition,I also work for cafe to leaning manage daily operation and group mentality.I would appreciate to learn and with responsibility as well.
Thank you for sparing a time to read,I would welcome an opportunity to meet with you for a personal interview.
Sincerely yours,

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Dear Sir/Madam:
I have learned from the website that there is TheXXX, and I wish to apply for the position.
I have already graduated from XXX this year, and I majored in Public administration and Policy. I have the knowledge of how companies bulid relations with government and citizens. I also learned about business management, including human resource, management and maket research. Moreover, I am truly interested in these fields.
After school, I worked for Office of Students Affairs of university. My major post included handling routine paper work, assisting supervisors on event organizations and entertaining foreign guests. I learned communication skills and now I know what the best work attitude can be. In addition, I also worked in the café to learn how to manage daily operation and group mentality. I appreciate the opportunity to learn these and I did my job with responsibility as well.
Thank you for sparing your precious time to read this letter, and I would welcome an opportunity to meet with you for a personal interview.
Sincerely yours,
你好,首先是注意每个逗号后面都要空一格.其次注意拼写.我改了一些语法错误,有些地方还是有明显的不通顺或者awkward sentence.
如果有不懂的可以追问,祝工作顺利.