雅思作文,求高人修改.一直觉得自己chinglish很严重,希望可以有高人帮我修改一下.马上就要考试了.

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雅思作文,求高人修改.一直觉得自己chinglish很严重,希望可以有高人帮我修改一下.马上就要考试了.
Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality continuously,students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on teachers.Others think the respect and discipline in the classroom will disappear.Which opinion do you prefer?
As the result of development of democracy and improvement of society in china,the right of public speaking has been enhanced increasingly including those students who are studying in school.Discussion about whether students should make comments on teachers has been widely debated.Personally,I think this trend will be identified as positive trend.Though there may create some social problems .
For students ,who were given the right to make comments or suggestions meant that they had already had a efficient listening when having class before they were to make comments .according to this way ,students’ passion towards learning would be arisen.For those teachers,through some suggesti

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