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Learning to say NO
We've all been taught that we should help people.It is the right thing to do and will make us popular with others.It may even win us favors in return.However,we must be realistic.We can't say yes to every request.If we did,we would fail or go crazy for sure.Sometimes we simply don't have the time to help.In this case,we must know how to say no politely.
Saying NO can be very difficult.People with low self-esteem very often have a lack of assertiveness and think they have to meet the expectations of everyone.It is very hard for them to set limits with others.They sometimes feel ashamed or guilty if they would say NO.But to do things against your will and possibilities will end up in feeling used and resentful.
A simple and direct "NO,I am not able to help you with that" is the best solution.If you want to (have to) give an explanation you should keep it simple:” NO,I have already made an another appointment for this time" or "NO,sorry.I am afraid I have to decline because I have no spare time."
If someone makes a request it is fair to ask for time to think it over.The decision should be up to you,but sometimes it is difficult to say NO right now.You can try to use an empathic NO,if you would have helped under different circumstances:
For example,if someone ask you to take care of his cat you may refuse like this
"Sorry,no.I would have kept your cat next weekend.But I will be off for visit.I know it will be hard to find someone to take care off the cat.I will try to help you next time."
We must not feel guilty about saying no.Sometimes refusing others is the right thing to do.It can save ourselves,and them,a lot of trouble.In short,we cannot please everyone all the time.Refusing favors is a part of life.
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Learning to say NO
We've all been taught that we should help people.It is the right thing to do and will （可以去掉will）make us popular with others.It may even win us favors in return.However,we must be realistic.We can't say yes to every request.If we did,we would fail or go crazy for sure.Sometimes we simply don't have the （去掉the）time to help.In this case,we must know how to say no politely.
Saying NO can be very difficult.People with low self-esteem very often have a lack of assertiveness and think they have to meet the expectations of everyone.（不太理解这句话的意思.低自尊的人总是喜欢迎合别人?低自尊和迎合别人有什么关系呢?）It is very hard （通常很少搭配very hard.very difficult 是一个固定搭配.你可以说 it is hard to do) for them to set limits with others.(set limits with others是什么意思呢）They sometimes feel ashamed or （加上一个even 会更好）guilty if they would say NO.But to do things against your will and possibilities will end up in feeling used and resentful.（被利用了?可能你可以这样说：However it is also difficult to against your will.)
A simple and direct "NO,I am not able to help you with that" is the best solution.If you want to (have to) give an explanation you should keep it simple:” NO,I have already made an another appointment for this time" or "NO,sorry.I am afraid I have to decline because I have no spare time."
If someone makes a request it is fair to ask for time to think it over.The decision should be up to you,but sometimes it is difficult to say NO right now.You can try to use an empathic NO,if you would have helped under different circumstances:
For example,if someone ask you to take care of his cat you may refuse like this
"Sorry,no.I would have kept your cat next weekend.But I will be off for visit.I know it will be hard to find someone to take care off (of) the cat.I will try to help you next time."
We must not feel guilty about saying no.Sometimes refusing others is the right thing to do.(To refuse others is reasonable.) It can save ourselves,and them,a lot of trouble.In short,we cannot please everyone all the time.Refusing favors is a part of life.
总的来说,不错.就是分论点少了点儿.你的总论点是：We should learn to say NO.但是你的分论点,我读完了,好像就是在说如果不拒绝别人,就会浪费我们很多时间和精力.如果可以,你可以写成总-分-总.总：we should learn to say No.分：why we should learn to say NO.First of all,Every one's time and energy is limited.然后分述；Secondly,...; Finally,.All in all,...