哪位英语达人帮忙看看有无用词不当和语法错误

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哪位英语达人帮忙看看有无用词不当和语法错误
The war in Iraq is not only the war in a special environment – the desert area,but also a high-tech war.We can see that the special environmental conditions have made it difficult for high-tech weapons to function well.In other words,environment has put great limit on such equipment.
Great heat in the desert may lead to the distortion of steel.Sand and high temperatures will make the advanced electronics be out of order.The spare parts will suffer from great wear and tear.Tanks,aircrafts and vehicles will consume more fuel than before,so the filter can be easily plugged by sand.Sand will make it difficult for the pilots to distinguish the desert from the sky,they may lose their direction.So it results in flying accidents and traffic issues there.
The U.S.military tanks’ aiming systems and infrared night vision device failed repeatedly,because they couldn’t suit the desert environment.The U.S.Air Force’s high-tech weapons have been limited by the enviro

答案

Sand and high temperatures(temperature) will make the advanced electronics be(be不需要了） out of order.Sand will make it difficult for the pilots to distinguish the desert from the sky,（.） they(They) may lose their direction.
because they couldn’t suit(adapt to) the desert environment.
As a result,an Apache helicopter had shot a friend tank in(by) mistake.
Numerous bitter lessons told us that we should attach importance to the impact of the environment in the process of developing,producing and using weapons,which,（if is ignored,） may result in the failure of the military.